Two Essays

New essays: task 2

Do copyright laws limit creativity or reward it? Would society function better without such rules and regulations? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people argue that the creative sector requires copyright regulations and that these laws are beneficial for society; however, others believe that these rules decrease creativity and should be abandoned. This essay will first discuss why copyrights are essential for many artists and then address the question of how society would lose many artists due to abandoning copyright laws.

Firstly, copyright rules are important for many artists and helps them to innovate their music. This is largely because artists must earn enough money in order to spend time on new creative tracks. For instance, Madonna, who continuously innovates her music is able to spend more time on new creative tracks because she sells a large number of cd’s. If there were no copyright rules, Madonna would have been copied instantly and would not have earned so much money. As a result of this she probably could not afford to spend time on recording new innovative songs. Therefore, this essay believes that copyrights are needed to give artists the chance to be creative.

Secondly, if copyright laws were to be abandoned, fewer people, such as musicians, painters and writers, would start a career in the creative sector. This is due to the fact that these people probably would not have a chance to earn enough money. For example, the Dutch creative film sector suffers from illegal downloads since people started to use their computer to share and download movies with others for free. Because of this, many Dutch movie production companies are not able to make Dutch films profitable. Therefore, this essay agrees that artists need protection by preserving and improving copyright laws.

In conclusion, although consumers might think that copying artwork is not that bad, it actually results in a society where art forms will be scarcer. It is predicted that countries with solid copyright laws will have more artists who can entertain the country inhabitants and bring them more joy and happiness.

New essays: task 1 ACADEMIC

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the sources of calories taken by British males of three different age groups (0-24 years, 25-49 years and those over 50).

In the age group 0 to 24 years old, it is clear that dairy is the number one calorie source comprising roughly 43% of total intake, while meat, pulses and vegetables are much less popular with 20%, 18% and 20% respectively. The males in the UK who are aged between 25 and 49 have other preferences; meat intake almost doubles compared to the previous group and reaches 50%, while dairy almost halves to 25%. Pulses and vegetables also fall in this age group to 10% and 15% respectively.

The eldest people in the category, males over 50, experience an enormous increase in pulses consumption compared to the other categories, reaching almost 75%, whereas, on the contrary, meat, dairy and vegetables witness their all time low with 20%, 15% and 10% respectively.

Overall, it is clear that every age group has its own favourite calorie source, although vegetables are not represented as favourite source of calories in any age group and remain low around 20%.

A New Essay

Some people think that international marketing is invasive and intrusive into the target country, while others feel that it is important to expose people to new languages, culture and ideas. This essay strongly agree with the latter argument since increasing cultural tolerance is more important than limiting competition.

International marketing can affect local investors who do business inside the target country, such as farmers who rely mainly on domestic production. This will have far reaching effects for the national economy since agriculture is fundamental to society. Secondly the natural resources of the country is utilised to the maximum to get the profits in which the country gets a small percentage.Furthermore introducing new languages and culture can affect the existing tradition in the country and this can disturb conservative people.

On the other hand , others feel that we can expand our horizons when we welcome international investors. The major point is that local business administrators are enlightened by the introduction of a variety of new business techniques and ideas. In addition, local investors face tough competition from these international companies which leads to improvement in the local business. On the whole the country is elevated to the next level in business. Furthermore it is an opportunity to get introduced to different languages and culture in the world.This can help us develop our personality.

In conclusion while both the ideas are held in the society I believe that encouraging international marketing is beneficial in various ways such as learning new ideas and techniques about the economy, developing the local business and learning other languages and lifestyles, even though some people oppose these as they consider international investors as a threat to the local economy.


A Written Correction

In this contemporary world, renewable energy has become a major concern to many nations. Some countries think that green energies such as wind and solar power are more cost-effective and environmentally friendly, while others question this type of energy’s safety. In my opinion, governments should encourage the use of green energy and I will explain further in this essay.

To begin with, people who are concerned about the reliability  of a new power source probably because of the dangerous fact of nuclear energy. Nuclear has long been seen as powerful and with great potential. However, it may easily escape control or be misused. If so, the damages that it brings to human being could be devastating and threatening. For example, during Word War 2, Japan’s two islands were flattened by America's atomic bombs and gene mutations caused by the nuclear radiation have affected local people ever since.

Nonetheless, the advantages and benefits that other green energies such as wind and solar power bring to people cannot be simply ignored. Firstly, those natural sources are free and sustainable. In contrast, traditional energy sources such as carbon or fossil fuels are unsustainable resources and getting more and more expensive. Secondly, they are beneficial to the environment in terms of being wastage free. Gas emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles lead to global warming. Therefore, if carbon-based fuels are replaced by wind or solar power systems, levels of greenhouse gases will certainly be reduced. Hence, this creates a good natural environment.

In conclusion, although new energy sources such as nuclear may be dangerous to a certain extent, in my opinion, governments should recognize more green energies as they are cheaper and cleaner.

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You covered most of the question, but the first paragraph should have been a discussion as to how green energy could be perceived as “insecure”, not “unsafe”.

There were many small corrections related to the correct word form or structure being used. Many were centered around the use of “to be” in some way.

This bar chart compares the number of waste hauling truck trips taken by Hauler A and Hauler B from July to September in the year of 2014.

Overall, both trucks travelled the most in August, while Hauler A and Hauler B individually did the fewest number of trips in July and September respectively. It is clear that the total number of truck trips were similar for July and September, about 180 each month.

Hauler A was dominant in July with 100 trips. In contrast, Hauler B exceeded Hauler A in both August and September. In addition, it showed a sharp increase from 85 trips to 145 trips in the first two months then decreased to 100 trips in September. Similarly, truck A also traveled nearly 20 trips more in August and dropped to 80 trips after that.

In conclusion, both truck trips went up in August and decreased in September and there was a dramatic rise in Hauler B’s trips.

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This was mostly great, but try to stick to this structure:

Definition (What does the graph tell us?)
General overview (What are the first things we notice?)
Detailed overview (All relevant detail)

Comparisons (When necessary)
Trends (When possible)

These task1 graphs don’t necessarily need a conclusion. Just a complete description of the data.

A Great Letter

You are going to visit the UK for an ‘English and Homestay’ program. Write a letter to the host family. In your letter:

– introduce yourself

– ask the family some questions to get essential information about the UK

– tell the family scheduled date of arrival and time

You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Mr and Mrs Smith,

My name is Yulia. I am a second year University student, and I study early child’s development and pre-school pedagogy. I love kids and animals, and I am very caring and nice person.  Originally I was born in Russia before I moved to Brazil, for now I can fluently speak 2 languages, and I really hope that I will improve my English while staying with you in the UK.  In your family profile, you mentioned that you have 2 toddlers and a dog, so I think we will be a perfect match.

Before coming to the UK, I’ve been reading lots of different guides about the country, but still I need to clarify some things. Since I am a vegetarian, I need to know if there are special places that sell vegetarian takeaways. One more thing that concerns me is the budget; my English school counselor told me that during our two weeks in the UK we will travel a lot, so I was wondering what are the fees for public transportation.

I will arrive at London airport at 11.20 am on the 25th of December, then I will need to collect my luggage, so basically I think it will take more than an hour to leave the airport, if you won’t be able to meet me at the airport, that is totally fine, as long as you give me instructions on how to get from the airport to your place.

Thank you in advance.

I am looking forward to meet your family.

Best,

Yulia


Two More Essays


Corrected Versions

Expected City Visits

The given bar chart provides information about predicted city visits from three countries of origin (Mexico, Canada and the USA) to London, Paris, Madrid and Istanbul in 2018.

Overall, it is noticeable that the most popular city is expected to be Paris for USA citizens, while the least popular are London and Istanbul for people from Mexico.

From the bar graph it is clear that Mexicans are expected to travel the fewest number of times; 20,000 are expected to visit each Istanbul and London. Visits to Paris are projected to be at the level of about 22,000. Madrid is predicted to be the most popular city for visiting with more than treble the previous figures, attracting more than 60,000.

Canadians are expected to travel with almost the same frequency to Paris and London (about 42 and 45 thousand respectively). The minimum of their visits is expected to be to Madrid, with 25 thousand, while the maximum, at just under 65 thousand, is expected in Istanbul.

Americans are predicted to travel much more than the other countries. The figures for their visits to Madrid and Istanbul are predicted to be 65 and 60 thousand accordingly. London is expected to be visited by 80,000 US citizens. Paris has the highest predicted number of visits, with 100 thousand, which is  one-fourth larger than London’s.

Should humans adapt to technology or should technology adapt to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent?

The issue of whether people should adapt to technology or technology should be adapted to humans has grown in importance since the advent of technological progress. I completely agree with the assertion that humans should incorporate technologies into their lives, as this is an integral part of modern humanity’s development.  Moreover, progress in this industry facilitates the acquisition of knowledge.

First of all it should be mentioned that main purpose of almost all technological inventions is to improve lives. Moreover, some devices may serve not only their initial aim, but may be used in other spheres of human activity. For instance, technological achievements made in computers and optical engineering due to their adaption to people’s needs widely serve in medicine. Although the rate of technological progress is undoubtedly high, humanity should continue to implement and transform it according to society’s demands.

Furthermore, human intelligence grows alongside the advance of technological industry. It can clearly be seen that modern scientists can deduce solutions for much more difficult problems and gain more profound knowledge than has been done before. For example, a recent report from Kyiv Politechnical University shows that  during the last 17 years humanity has gotten triple the cosmological data than was acquired during the whole of the last century. Consequently, if people go on developing various technological fields, they will get yet more data from the universe.

To conclude, from the arguments and examples given above I firmly believe technology should be adapted to humans. Additionally, people’s intelligence could not have achieved its current level without technological progress.


Original Versions

Expected City Visits

Given is the bar chart providing information about predicted city visits by three country of origin (Mexico, Canada and the USA) for the year 2018. Cities to visit are London, Paris, Madrid and Istanbul.

Overall, it is noticeable that the most popular city is suggested to be Paris for USA citizens, while the least ones are London  and Istanbul for people from Mexico.

From the bar graph it is clear that Mexicans are expected to travel the fewest number of times. 20 thousands of their visits are predicted to be done evenly to Istanbul and London. Visits to Paris are suggested to be at the level of about 22 thousand. Madrid is predicted as the most popular city for visiting – it more than treble previous figures marking more than 60 thousand.

Canadians are expected to travel with almost the same frequency to Paris and London (about 42 and 45 thousand respectively). Minimum of their visits is suggested to be done to Madrid – 25 thousand, while maximum at just under 65 thousand – to Istanbul.

Americans are suspected to travel much more than previous countries. The figures for their visits to Madrid and Istanbul are predicted to be 65 and 60 thousand accordingly. London is expected to be visited by US citizens for 80 thousands of times. Paris has the highest predicted number of visits – 100 thousand, which is  one-fourth bigger than former one.

Should humans adapt to technology or should technology adapt to us? Is technology making us intellectually weaker or more intelligent?

The issue of whether people should adapt to technology or should technology adapt to humans has grown in importance since the advent of technological progress. I completely agree with the assertion that adaption of technologies to their creature is an integral part of human’s development.  Moreover, progress in this industry facilitates process of acquisition of knowledge.

First of all it should be mentioned that main purpose of almost all technological inventions is to improve human’s life. Moreover, some devices may serve  not only for their initial aim, but also they may be used in other spheres of people’s activity. For instance, technological achievements made in computers and optical engineering due to their adaption to people’s needs widely serve in medicine. Although the speed  of technological progress is unbelievably high, humanity should continue to implement and transform it according to society’s demands.

Furthermore, human’s intelligence grows alongside with the increase of technological industry. It can clearly be seen that modern scientists can deduce solutions for much more difficult problems and gain more profound knowledge than it has been done before. For example, the recent report from Kyiv Politechnical University shows that  during the last 17 years humanity has gotten information about our Space three times as much as it had been done during the last century. Consequently, if people go on developing various technological fields, they will get more data from the world around.

To conclude, from the arguments and examples given above I firmly believe technology should be adopted to humans. Additionally, people’s intelligence could not achieve its current level without technological progress.

Two Essays

Corrected Versions There is less communication between family members of late. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

The issue of reduced interaction among family members has grown in importance year on year. This essay strongly agrees that in these modern times people spend little to no time with their families. This essay will illustrate why people tend to spend less time with their family members using the examples of social media and the demands of high standards of living to support the argument.

Firstly, due to technological advancement, the use of smartphones has become quite common, to the extent that most people spend the majority of their time on phone. Furthermore, by checking social media incessantly, individuals perceive that they are communicating or keeping in touch with their family members by merely receiving comments and responding to them on a regular basis via their social media accounts, such as facebook, Instagram, snapchat and WhatsApp. Therefore, smartphones could be one reason for diminishing conversation between family members.

Secondly, people are under greater work pressure from their superiors which results in more career-related stress and worry, even after working hours. In addition to this, the increased demand of meeting societal standards forces many people to take up extra jobs in order to meet these demands; for example, buying a house these days is extremely expensive, and thus people must work far more and resultantly have less time to communicate with their loved ones.

To conclude, I believe that communication has indeed diminished since the advent of mobile technologies, and although having very little time for family interaction is a major issue, I believe it is a requirement of an individual to fulfil the demands of modern life.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imagination than reading.To what extent do you agree ? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Whether participating in entertaining activities with children develops improved skills and creativity when compared to reading is a debatable topic. Reading being an important aspect of a growing child, it should not be forgotten that other pastimes such as playing video games and sports are also crucial. This essay will illustrate that play is as important as reading ,if not more, using examples of playstation and sports to support the argument.

On the one hand, there are numerous benefits to playing electronic games. This is because they help to improve active skills and spatial awareness. Furthermore, playing on game consoles may require both visual and audial memory which in turn enhances recall ability. For example, if a child is playing a videogame he or she must remember the rules throughout the game. Therefore it is evident that playing on game consoles such as PlayStation develops important skills.

On the other hand, sport plays a crucial role in the balanced growth of healthy children. This is due to a fact that physical games tend to result in healthy growth of bones and muscles. In addition to this, it also results in improved interpersonal skills including cooperation and leadership. For example, when a soccer player sees a chance to make a goal, he makes the kick. Therefore it is extremely important activity to a child’s development.

To conclude, although reading has many advantages during early years of young children. I believe that entertaining engagement with children is just as important.

Original Versions

There is less communication between family members of late. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree?

The issue of little interaction among family members has grown in importance year on

year .I strongly that in these modern times people spend little to no time with their families. This essay will illustrate that why people tend to spend less time with their family members using the examples of social media and the demands of high standards of living to support the argument.

Firstly, due to technological advancement the use of smart phones has become quite common. Therefore most people spent their large portion of time on phone. Furthermore , by checking the social media incessantly , indivisuals perceive as they are communicating or in touch with their family members by merely receiving comments and responding them on regular basis on their social media accounts.

For example, facebook , Instagram , snapchat and WhatsApp. Therefore smartphones could be one reason for little conversation between family members.

Secondly , people are under grater work pressure from their superiors which results in more stress and worry about the work even after job hours. In addition to this , the increased demand of meeting societal standards makes a person to take up extra jobs in order to meet the demands of societal standards for example buying a house , as its very expensive in these modern times. Thus, people are always working and get fewer time to have communication with them.

To conclude, although having very little time for family interaction is a major issue , I believe it is a requirement of an indivisual to fulfil the demands of modern life.

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and imagination than reading.To what extent do you agree ? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Whether entertaining activities with children develops improved skills and creativity when compared to reading is a debatable topic. Reading being an important aspect of a growing child it should not be forgotten tht other skills such as playing video games and sports  is also very crucial .This essay will illustrate that playing is as important as reading if not more , using examples of playstation and sports to support the argument.

On the one hand , there are numerous benefits of playing  electronic games. This is because it helps in improving active skills and spatial awareness. Furthermore , playing on game consoles may require both visual and audial memory which in turn enhances memory . For example if a child is playing a video game he has to remember the rules throughout the game. Therefore it’s clear that playing on game consoles such as PlayStation develops important skills.

On the other hand , sport plays a crucial part in balanced growth of healthy children. This is due to a fact that physical games tend to result in healthy growth of bones and muscles. In addition to this , it also results in improved personal skills , including cooperation and leadership. For example , when a soccer player sees a chance to make a goal , he makes the kick. Therefore it is extremely important activity to a child’s development.

To conclude, although reading has many advantages during early years of young children. I believe, entertaining engagement with the kids is as important.